A "New" Apartment in Nottingham Woods
Here's the opening sentence from a student's report on his first impressions of a new apartment:
Yesterday morning I toured my "exclusive" new apartment in Nottingham Woods, an apartment that I had foolishly rented sight unseen.Below you'll find six sets of notes and short sentences describing some of the things that the student observed as he walked through the apartment. On your own paper, organize these details into six complete sentences. (The first set has been done for you, though other combinations are possible.) Try to include all the specific details, but leave out anything that sounds vague or repetitious.*
- Footprints marched across the ceiling.
the living room ceiling
stiff wedges of pizza
pizza ground into the carpet
Footprints marched across the ceiling in the living room, and stiff wedges of pizza were ground into the carpet.
- Light bulbs were smashed in their sockets.
Several sets of initials were carved into the coffee table.
torn sofa cushions
cushions dusted with crushed saltines
- stale odor
dozens of Bud Lite cans lined up on the windowsills
Bud Lite cans stacked up in a pyramid in one corner
- puddles of milk and orange juice in the kitchen
half-empty cat food cans on the counter
mound of eggshells in the sink
- The refrigerator door was wide open.
old tennis shoe inside the refrigerator
- The bathroom was just as bad.
shaving cream on the walls
sock jammed into the drain of the bathtub
name "Fred" written in toothpaste on the mirror
Compare your sentences with the sample combinations on page two.
*For additional guidelines on how to develop effective sentences, see What Is Sentence Combining and How Does It Work?