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Sample Example Paragraph: Junk Food Junkie

Identifying Connections and Adding Conclusions


Sample Example Paragraph: Junk Food Junkie

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The following paragraph is effectively developed with specific examples. The paragraph is also well organized, but it lacks a satisfactory concluding sentence. Respond to the questions that follow "Junk Food Junkie."

Junk Food Junkie

I confess: I am the worst junk food junkie in this great gluttonous galaxy of sugar and fat. You can keep your lentils, granola, and prunes. I want calories and carbohydrates, burgers and fries. Within minutes after waking up grouchy and puffy eyed in the morning, I stumble to the kitchen and pour myself a tall glass of ice cold Pepsi. Ahh! My tongue tingles and my eyes pop open. I then have the energy to eat. I rummage through the refrigerator, push aside the yogurt and apples, and there it is: a fat slice of leftover pepperoni pizza. That's enough to get me off to school and through my first class. Of course, I then head to the store on my first break for a Snickers bar and a Diet Pepsi. The "lite" soft drink, you see, compensates for the calories in the candy. An hour or two later, for lunch, I gobble down a row of Double Stuf Golden Oreos and a peanut butter sandwich, all sloshed down with a pint of chocolate milk. Later in the afternoon I stop at Five Guys to devour a double bacon cheeseburger and a monster order of sodium-loaded fries. Finally, before going to bed, I knock off a bag of Philly Cheese Steak Rippled Potato Chips--dripping with onion dip.

Study Questions

  1. The writer uses time order to organize her examples. List the time transitions (see Cohesion Strategies: Transitional Words and Phrases) that you find in the paragraph.

  2. What short sentence does the writer use to guide us from the Pepsi example to the pizza example?

  3. What sentence does the writer use to guide us from the pizza example to the next example?

  4. Create a sentence that you think would conclude this sentence effectively.

For sample responses to these study questions, go to page two.

See also: Sample Example Paragraph: Confessions of a Slob.

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