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Example Paragraph: Confessions of a Slob

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Example Paragraph: Confessions of a Slob

Confessions of a Slob

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The following paragraph is effectively developed with specific examples. The paragraph is also well organized, but it's missing a satisfactory concluding sentence. Respond to the questions that follow "Confessions of a Slob."

Confessions of a Slob

A quick tour through my house will convince you that I am an extremely messy person. In fact, some would say I'm a slob. Starting in my bedroom, you will see clothes tossed around as if thieves had just looted the place. T-shirts dangle from door knobs, socks sit balled up on top of the dresser, and blue jeans cover the floor like a drop cloth. A trail of shoes and sneakers leads you out of the bedroom and into the bathroom. There you will stand on a sopping towel and see a blow-dryer and a copy of Newsweek lying on the sink alongside an uncapped tube of Crest. Just behind you is the towel rack: no towel, naturally, just a dripping shirt and a crusty old bathrobe belt. Next to the bathroom is the kitchen--slob headquarters. To the left are erupting bags of garbage, a bald tire, and a tall stack of yellow newspapers. To the right you'll notice a greasy oven stacked high with pots and--beside it--a sink full of gray water and dirty dishes.

Study Questions

  1. The writer uses place order to organize his examples. List the place transitions (see Coherence Strategies: Transitional Words and Phrases) that you find in the paragraph.

  2. What sentence does the writer use to guide us from the bedroom to the bathroom?

  3. Create a sentence that you think would conclude this sentence effectively.

For sample responses to these study questions, go to page two.

See also: Sample Example Paragraph: Junk Food Junkie.

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